The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003
This
line graph illustrates the data about the percentage of people who played video games more than 10 hours a week classified by their age between 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that the majority of the youngest group played video games more than 10 hours per week, whereas
elderly
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the elderly
was
not as interested as their younger counterparts in playing video games and only a small minority proportion spent more than 10 hours a week on Correct subject-verb agreement
were
this
type of hobby.
By looking at the details, regarding individuals between 16 and 24, their time
play increased sharply during the first 2 years of the period. It was followed a steady growth, after which it rose significantly reaching its peak at about 70%. With respect to second
age group which Add an article
the second
was
consisted of folks between 45 and 54, at the Unnecessary verb
apply
begining
of the given Correct your spelling
beginning
time
frame, the time
they devoted to playing plunged. After that the figure representing this
age group,
showed a robust rise to 50%. Having remained stable for several years, In 2015 the percentage Remove the comma
apply
of
rose slightly to about 55%.
Concerning other lines, it could be elucidated that despite being older, the people who were between 25 and 44 years old had less Change preposition
apply
time
to enjoy such
an entertainments
.Correct the article-noun agreement
entertainment
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