The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003
This
line graph illustrates the data about the percentage of people who played video games more than 10 hours a week classified by their age between 2010 and 2015.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that the majority of the youngest group played video games more than 10 hours per week, whereas
elderly
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the elderly
was
not as interested as their younger counterparts in playing video games and only a small minority proportion spent more than 10 hours a week on Correct subject-verb agreement
were
this
type of hobby.
By looking at the details, regarding individuals between 16 and 24, their time
play increased sharply during the first 2 years of the period. It was followed a steady growth, after which it rose significantly reaching its peak at about 70%. With respect to second
age group which Add an article
the second
was
consisted of folks between 45 and 54, at the Unnecessary verb
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begining
of the given Correct your spelling
beginning
time
frame, the time
they devoted to playing plunged. After that the figure representing this
age group,
showed a robust rise to 50%. Having remained stable for several years, In 2015 the percentage Remove the comma
apply
of
rose slightly to about 55%.
Concerning other lines, it could be elucidated that despite being older, the people who were between 25 and 44 years old had less Change preposition
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time
to enjoy such
an entertainments
.Correct the article-noun agreement
entertainment
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