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The table below shows daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004

The table below shows daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004
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The table demonstrates how the amount of
oil
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 four African countries produced daily changed from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
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, the daily production of
oil
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 grew in all countries with the exception of
Congo
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, where it fell. What is
also
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 worth mentioning is that
while
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Congo
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 produced
most
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oil
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 in the region
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, it was eventually surpassed by Nigeria.
Congo
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 and Nigeria were the key
oil
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 producers throughout the period. In 2000, the amount of
oil
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 produced daily in
Congo
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 was 275,000
barrels
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, which had gradually dropped to around 200,000 by 2004.
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, the production figure for Nigeria was somewhat erratic. It
initially
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 went up by 5,000
barrels
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 per day to reach 210,000 in 2001 before dropping to 190,000 the next year, but it
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bounced back to 213,000
barrels
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 per day by 2004. Chad and
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Somalia
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,
on the other hand
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, manufactured smaller amounts of
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. In fact, no
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 was produced in Chad until 2003, when production initiated with 8,000
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 of
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 per day. The following year,
this
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 figure skyrocketed to 50,000, putting it on par with Somalia. Somalia
also
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 saw its
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 industry grow substantially. After years of uninterrupted growth, it was producing ten times as much
oil
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 in 2004 as it did in the initial year
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 when the figure was merely 5,000
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 daily.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, congo, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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