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​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The above pie chart illustrates the average
consumption
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 of
food
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 in the year 2008. The chart depicted
consumption
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 patterns in the
world
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 in comparison with the two most populated countries namely, India and China.
Overall
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, the
world
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's
consumption
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 of
food
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 and Indian
food
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 patterns are similar in nature with major
food
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 sources as processed
food
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.
However
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, the primary
food
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 items in China are processed
food
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 vegetables and fruits.
According to
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 the statistics, processed
food
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 is the prominent
food
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item
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 among all which has 41 per cent intake in global level, 34 per cent
consumption
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 rate in China and 39 per cent in India as well. Next come vegetables and fruits which have a
consumption
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 rate of 32% among Chinese people which seem to be a main course
item
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. But it is not that influential in the global market and in the case of Indians as well. Animal
food
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 has 26%
consumption
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 at the
world
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 level
whereas
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 15% is consumed among Chinese which is the least preferred
food
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 for them.
On the other hand
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, Indians have a 27%
consumption
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 rate which is the second most consumed
food
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item
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 among them. Nuts and seeds are the least eaten
food
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item
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 in the
world
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 and among Indians but it is one of the competitive foods for Chinese people.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, food, world, item with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average consumption
  • Global composition
  • Food category
  • Meat, vegetables, fruits, grains
  • Percentage, proportion
  • Comparative analysis
  • Similarities and differences
  • Intake, consumption patterns
  • Striking differences
  • Notable similarities
  • Higher/lower consumption
  • Significant difference
  • Proportionate share
  • Relevant comparison
  • General trend
  • Insight
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