The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Contained in the bar chart is information relating to the
proportion
of daily Internet users in various
age
groups in the UK between 2003 and 2006
Overall
, all
age
groups experienced an upward trend over the period.
Additionally
, despite seeing a decrease in percentage, the 16-24
age
group
still had the most users among 5 different
age
group
Looking at the figures for people in
16
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-24
age
group
, its number kept steady at 80% in 2003 and 2004.
This
proportion
then
rose to 100% before seeing a decrease to roughly 90% in 2006. Regarding
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people aged 25-44, the
proportion
in
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Internet users rose nearly to 60% in 2004 from approximately 45%.
This
number kept rising to roughly 70% in 2005 and 80% in 2006.
Similarly
, the figures in
45
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-54
age
group
experienced an
increase
from 60% in 2003 to nearly 65% in 2004.
This
figure
then
had a slight
increase
to exactly 80%
at the end
of the period. Moving onto the remaining two
age
groups, it is apparent that the numbers in the percentage were smaller. In reference to the individuals in
55
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-64
age
group
, the
proportion
had a slight
increase
to approximately 32% in 2005 from roughly 30%.
Following
this
was a rise to roughly 40% in 2007.
Last
but not least, the percentage
in
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people who were over 65 saw a slight decrease to 26% in 2005 before seeing an
increase
to nearly 20%
at the end
of the timeframe.
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