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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line chart compares the average monthly
temperatures
 in Paris,
Dubai
 and
Sydney
. In general,
Sydney
's
temperature
 trends
was
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were
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 opposite to the other two cities, and in most of
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the months
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months
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months,
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Dubai
's
temperature
 was the highest. From
Januray
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January
 to July, the
temperatures
 in Paris and
Dubai
 were rising
while
 the figure in
Sydney
 was decreasing from 24
celdus
 to 14
celdus
.
And these
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These
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 three
temperature
 trends were different from August to December. the
temperatures
 in the two
Norhern
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Northern
Hemisphere
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Hemispheres
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were
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dropped sharply
with
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to
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 15
celdus
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cells
. In
the
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contrast,
Sydney
's
temperature
 increased during that time. It is obvious that
Dubai
 had the highest
temperature
averagely
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average
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 from March to November which was all above 23
celdus
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degrees
. And its
temperatures
 were approximately 15
celdus
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degrees
 higher than Paris's. From December to
Feburary
Correct your spelling
February
,
Sydney
's
temperatures
 were the highest, but the gap with Bubai's was not big.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, dubai, sydney, temperature, celdus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • major cities
  • trends
  • temperature changes
  • comparisons
  • yearly pattern
  • geographical location
  • climate zones
  • significant variations
  • notable differences
  • peak temperatures
  • lowest temperatures
  • fluctuations
  • seasonal changes
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