The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the purposes
people
in Great Britain had for visiting art
museums
in 1990 and 2000. In general,
people
mostly visited
museums
to learn and gain knowledge in both periods and it made up the largest category
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nearly half.  Looking at the pie charts more closely, one can see that
people
who attended to fill their travel schedules were up to 27% in 1990,
then
it dropped to nearly half in 2000. Meanwhile, those who wanted to spend time with friends and family in
museums
accounted for 12% in 1990,
then
it moderately increased by 17% in 2000.
Additionally
, 12% of the
people
in 1990 visited
museums
for
the
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special exhibitions,
then
it went up to 18% in 2000.
Also
, only 1% of the visitors in 1990 went to the museum to buy art,
while
5% of the visitors did in 2000.
Finally
, there were no significant changes in the proportion for other reasons than
listed
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above.
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