The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares eight types of spending in terms of the weekly income of households in a certain country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, families in 1968 spent the largest proportion of their income
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food, and
this
percentage far
outweigh
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other spending categories. But in 2018, people tend to distribute their income more equally, in comparison with 40 years ago. In 1968,
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average, a family spent 35% money to buy food, but
this
proportion fell to approximately 17.5% in 2018.
In contrast
, the figure for housing and transport almost doubled, from 10% to just under 20%,
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% to 14%, respectively. And spending
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leisure activities shows the largest increase by around 13% over the
40 years
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40-year
period. Data of
others
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categories changed relatively little. Families' weekly spending
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household goods remained unchanged at 8%. Money allocated to fuel and power was 6% in 1968 and 4% in 2018.
Finally
, the figure for 'clothing and
footware
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footwear
' and 'Personal goods' both
had
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fell by about 5% 40 years later, from 10% to 5% and 8% to 4%, respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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