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Bar chart on average time (hours) a teacher spent teaching in three different school types in 4 countries in 2001

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The bar chart illustrates how many
hours
 teachers in
Japan
,
Spain
, Ireland and the USA spent teaching in primary, lower secondary and upper secondary in 2001.
Overall
, teaching
hours
 in upper secondary were generally highest in all countries, except Ireland.
In addition
, the respective figures in the USA and
Japan
 were consistently the largest and the smallest. It is
also
 clear that the average time that teachers in
Japan
 and
Spain
 taught in primary and lower secondary was equal. Looking first at the countries that have different data in primary and secondary, each schoolteacher in the USA taught upper secondary pupils about 1100
hours
 per year, followed by the lower secondary students (1050
hours
) and primary (850
hours
).
This
 nation created a far distance from others.
Conversely
, pupils at lower secondary in Ireland were taught the most at exactly 800
hours
 and upper secondary kept the second position at 780
hours
. Meanwhile, the figures for primary in
this
 country were lowest and equal with its counterparts in
Japan
 and
Spain
. Turning to the remaining areas, educators in
Japan
 and
Spain
 taught the most in upper secondary, but the figures for the latter were far higher than the former, at 620 and under 1000
hours
 in that order. It is considerable that teaching
hours
 in both were the same, at exactly 600
hours
.
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Although the introduction provides a clear overview, adding a concise conclusion summarizing the key findings would enhance the structure of the essay.
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While the main points are generally clear, ensure that each point is clearly connected to the next to improve overall coherence and flow.
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The essay clearly addresses the task, providing a detailed comparison of teaching hours across different countries and school levels.
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Good use of specific data and figures from the bar chart to support the main points.

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