In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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are believed
that it is an important need Wrong verb form
believe
spending
a huge amount of money Change the verb form
to spend
for making
new railway lines for Change preposition
to make
fastly
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fast
transporting
from Replace the word
transport
a
city to anotherCorrect determiner usage
one
one
, Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
others think that better to spent
money on growing Change the form of the verb
spend
the
public transport which Correct article usage
apply
are
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is
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As far as some people think the railways between cities have to Correct your spelling
exciting
build
so that being faster may have some personal goals or needs. Students and Wrong verb form
be built
employes
who are working or Correct your spelling
employees
studing
in a city Correct your spelling
studying
that is
not their own city should travel usually because of their situation, so they need to do it fast with
less cost, Change preposition
at
for
this
reason
they think making new types of them is helpful for them. In Add the comma(s)
reason,
this
way they would be able to do their journey eseaer
, faster and cheaper.
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easier
On the other
hand
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hand,
ther
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there
is
a number of people Correct subject-verb agreement
are
want
public transportation Correct pronoun usage
who want
be
more Add the particle
to be
exiting
and I Correct your spelling
exciting
believed
that they are the ones Wrong verb form
believe
whoes
children and families are doing some course or work in their own town they absolutely are believed Correct your spelling
whose
who's
this
changes make not only their love ones more comfortable but Change the determiner
these
also
themselves get more satisfied there is their need because they use this
vehichels
each day in a week and Correct your spelling
vehicle
vehicles
their
in their minds Replace the word
there
this
transporting are getting boring so they want them to be more exiting
.
I Correct your spelling
exciting
also
believe making more exiting
public transportation is more Correct your spelling
exciting
nessesary
because Correct your spelling
necessary
of
the user who Change preposition
apply
use
them Change the verb form
uses
are including
some Wrong verb form
include
childreen
and they are always our first priority. Even Correct your spelling
children
dough
I am not a Correct your spelling
though
profacional
in Correct your spelling
professional
this
matter but
it was my opinion and I think that better Correct word choice
apply
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think Correct word choice
if they
and
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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