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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The chart illustrates how much
electricity
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 was produced and consumed in the ten biggest
countries
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 in the world in 2014.
First,
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the biggest consumer and producer of
electricity
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 was
China
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, followed by the US. In
China
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, the
production
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 was 5398
billion
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kWh
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 and
consumption
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were
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was
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 50
billion
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kWh
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 less.
However
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, in the US, the gap between
production
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 and
consumption
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 accounted for approximately 200
billion
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kWh
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, between 4099 and 3866
billion
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kWh
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 respectively.
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, Germany was the only location where the
electricity
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 was 10% more used than produced, 526
billion
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kWh
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 compared with 582
billion
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kWh
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.
Finally
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, Korea was the
last
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 among the top ten
countries
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, with 485
billion
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kWh
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production
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 and 449
billion
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kWh
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consumption
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 figures, which accounted for 10% of
China
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's statistics,
while
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 the rest of the
countries
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 varied from around 10% to 20%.
Overall
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, there was a disparity in the creation and usage of
electricity
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 between the
countries
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, when
China
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 and the United States were two-thirds and all the rest eight
countries
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 only one-third of the total
electricity
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 industry, and only in Germany did the
consumption
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overpass
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surpass
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 the
production
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 figures.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, countries, china, production, billion, kwh, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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