In some countries, it is illegal for companies to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a positive or negative development?

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It is unlawful for companies in some countries to reject volunteers for jobs
due to
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their age. In my solid, opinion
this
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is a negative trend
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the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, some careers should have an age limitation and if someone does it legally, it may hurt them.
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, research by a hard-working student at the University of New South Wales has shown that a girl
recently
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graduated from high
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school
wanted to work as a writer and poet in a well-known company. Not only she did not have any experience, but she was
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only an
18 year olds
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18-year-old
girl who could not stay outdoors. Turning to
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, it is because they have created a chance
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for olderly
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olderly
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elderly
older
people
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a job
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job
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jobs
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in future. In
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term, older people
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sometime
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need
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and
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a refund for their living. And
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is
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a lot of positive effect
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their company to find, more younger individuals to find jobs. Because younger citizens can take more practise easier. In spite of their lack of experience, they can learn more social
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because they are
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more flexible
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than the
olders
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holders
older
.
To sum up
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, it is illegal for many
business
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to
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define
development for their age and it can be getting a lot of benefits and developments developed to their company and country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age diversity
  • combat age discrimination
  • job opportunities
  • experienced individuals
  • vast knowledge
  • suboptimal hiring decisions
  • legal compliance
  • reverse discrimination
  • operational costs
  • health insurance
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