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The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages.

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages.
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The provided bar charts
depicts
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 the percentage of students at the age of 14 to 16 studying foreign
languages
 in English-spoken nations and the 3 most learned
languages
. From an overarching viewpoint, it was evident that the number of
learners
 showed a downward trend. In terms of the 3 most
learning
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languages
,the rates for French and German, at the same time, all fell down,
while
 Spanish revealed a rising tendency. Regarding the number
foreign-language
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learners
, the figures for both female and male students saw a slight fall, starting at 49
percent
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 and 30
percent
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 in 1984,
then
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 by respectively 9
percent
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 and 5
percent
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 in 2007. In terms of the top 3
languages
 learned
,
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 the figures depict the downward trend of French and German
learners
. As can be seen, French had a substantial decline, in 2007 the calculation of language-learning individuals had been halved compared to the proportion of 50
percent
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 of that in 1984. Meanwhile, German
also
 had the same tendency, the figure commenced at 20
percent
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 in 1984 and
then
 went down to nearly 15
percent
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 in 2007.
However
, Spanish
learners
 showed the contrary trend, the proportion rose from 5
percent
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within
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 1984 to 10
percent
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within
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in
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 2007.
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