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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The map shows significant changes in Chorleywood town from 1868 to 1994.
Initially
, there were two main roads and the first village was built in 1868 along the vertical main road.
However
, it started to change a lot from
then
. From 1883 to 1922, the second village was made right next to the first one. After, a new railway was constructed in 1909,
while
 the Chorleywood station passed the second village. As part of the development, two massive villages were newly developed
line
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the
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 railway from 1922 to 1970 and a new motorway was
also
 constructed in 1970. As the motorway crossed both the railway and one of the
mainroads
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main roads
, new huge villages were built around those two crossings. Meanwhile,
the
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Chorleywood Park with
golf
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the golf
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 course is located at the
center
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 of the town so all people from the villages can approach from all directions.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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