Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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it is widely claimed that the best
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is to accept bad
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such
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as jobs or shortage of money sometimes, others argue that the struggle to improve
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is better. Both points of view and reasons why I agree with the latter statement will be elaborated on in
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with, it
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sensible for some to believe that some
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have
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of resolving
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because they have the potential to overcome
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hassles. Take inadequate
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finances,
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; there are countless solutions to take into
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account
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jobs,
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costs of
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nonsensical
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money from either family members or financial
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. Many
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of
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that some situations that
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numerous uncontrolled factors could make the
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bad which
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no other
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but to just accept it.
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, getting robbed, if lucky enough you would get your valuables back. But
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you did everything you could but still cannot
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it back? the only way to
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with could be to just accept it and
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on.
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, I personally argue in favour of figuring out
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seeing that there
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a solution
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every problem. As the wise one once said; where there is a will, there is a way, people will always find
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to solve things if there is enough passion. In conclusion,
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some point all you have to accept
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for unwanted
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, I am of the opinion that it is better to find
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to improve it to better as it is
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to support our
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coherence/cohesion
Consider proofreading to correct grammatical errors (e.g., 'whatif' should be 'what if', 'there always a solution' should be 'there is always a solution').
coherence/cohesion
Improve the logical flow by using more connecting words and phrases to link ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Ensure all main points are thoroughly supported by relevant examples and explanations to strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
Revise to ensure a balanced argument by giving equal weight to both perspectives before presenting your own viewpoint.
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Clarify and expand on certain sentences to avoid ambiguity and improve clarity.
introduction/conclusion
The introduction clearly states both viewpoints and the writer's position on the issue.
supported main points
The essay includes relevant examples to support the points discussed.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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