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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there is an ongoing debate regarding
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schools
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 are enhancing the education's environments by allowing
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 to comment or criticize their lecturers.
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, the opponents argue that it will reduce the
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 between learners and teachers. From my perspective,
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 effect
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 educational quality, it
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 should be used as a stringent method
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 teaching. On the one hand, there is a wide range of benefits
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 encouraging to give
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 learning at
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schools
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 as improving
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, making good
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 and providing elevated teaching methods.
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, if we visualise
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 as the customers and teachers as the
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 providers, it is
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 to understand that the customers should give comments on what they are receiving or using so that the
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 providers can improve their products effectively.
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, by giving
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, those who are providing lessons have more opportunities to comprehend their learners and engage with them, so that they can clear the gaps between generations and make it more collaborative.
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, it is important to acknowledge the opposing viewpoint, which
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 many negative effects
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 allowing criticism from the
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. To illustrate
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, let's consider the example of when lecturers receive bad comments about them from a minority of their
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, it will obviously waste their time to solve the issues from that one or two
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 the others of a forty-people class are feeling comfortable with their teaching methods.
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, it will demonstrate some unacceptable behaviours from the
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 as criticizing
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anyone they want, when they are allowed to be more powerful at
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, it might lead to some vulnerable actions if possible. In summary, after
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 both sides of the argument, it is crucial that receiving comments in
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 environment helps to improve teaching methodology
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,
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, my suggestion is
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 anonymous
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 communication room when giving criticisms, so that the negative effects will be inhibited and the teachers will improve their teaching in positive ways.
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, striking a balance between both aforementioned views is essential for every high
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task achievement
Ensure that the essay addresses all parts of the prompt. The introduction sets the stage well, but the conclusion would benefit from a more decisive stance to reinforce your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the essay. A more balanced approach to the discussion can improve logical flow.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to provide clear, relevant support to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repeating similar points to ensure each paragraph presents a unique perspective or idea.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and well-articulated, which aids in making your viewpoint clear.
task achievement
You have provided a complete response to the task, addressing both viewpoints and providing your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
The main points are generally well-supported, enhancing the overall clarity of your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • constructive criticism
  • classroom discipline
  • educational quality
  • teaching methods
  • learning outcomes
  • classroom management
  • teacher-student relationship
  • collaborative
  • real-world communication
  • professional growth
  • hierarchy
  • formal barrier
  • structured feedback mechanisms
  • anonymous surveys
  • moderated discussions
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