Writing Task 1 The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart illustrates the data of students attending four secondary school types
during
2000-2009 years
Change preposition
from
Overall
, it can be seen that,
the least proportion of students choose the specialist schools in each year.
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In contrast
to that, voluntary-controlled direction is the most popular option among the pupils, with over 20% every period.
Looking at the details, we can find out that ,in 2000 an upward tendency was in voluntary-controlled type education, which involved half of the participants. While
, in 2009 this
statistic dropped to 20%.
Whereas
, community schools show a dramatical
increase from 12% to 58% in the same year.
Replace the word
dramatic
On the other hand
, there were also
two educational systems that, stayed with around 11%. Although
, grammar classes in 2000's
were in Fix apostrophe usage
2000s
the
second place after the voluntary collegesCorrect article usage
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