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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1972 and 2000 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1972 and 2000 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the amount of transported devices used for various kinds of transition ( highways, oceans, railways and pipelines ) in the United Kingdom over a 28-year period.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most popular ways were highways,
while
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 the lowest interest was seen in pipeline systems. Both water and railways had a fluctuating trend over the given period. In 1974, route transitions were the highest desired way with 70
million
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tonnes
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,
while
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piping
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the piping
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 system was the least occupated one with almost 5
million
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tonnes
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. The other types of transportation, ships and trains, were at the same amount of transition by roughly 40
million
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tonnes
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. Turning to the following years, in 1978, ship transportation reached
train
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the train
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 system and the next year, it overtook its rival and ended up at just over 60
million
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tonnes
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.
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, the rail transition decreased gradually to almost 30
million
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tonnes
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 and experienced a fluctuating trend over the following years and ended up at the first amount.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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