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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.
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Contained in the tables is data relating to the number of
potatoes
 which have been consumed and produced by five different continents during 2006. From an observational perspective, it can be seen that
Europe
 had the highest potato consumption
while
 the consumption in Africa had the lowest.
In addition
, another silent point is that the majority of
potatoes
 are produced in
Europe
 and Asia. Looking at the figures in
further
 detail, the number of
potatoes
 consumed in
Europe
 was ranked first out of the five continents around 96,1
kg
 per European and it was more consumed than in North
America
 by around 40
kg
 per person.
Furthermore
, both South and Central
America
 and Asia followed a similar trend at more than 20
kg
 per person and
then
 clearly the least consumption
potatoes
 in Africa approximately 14,1
kg
 per African. Turning to the remaining statistics. The main production of
potatoes
 in
Europe
 and Asia at roughly 126,3 and 132,2
million
 tonnes, respectively.
Moreover
, it is evident that North
America
 was ranked second among the given
potatoes
 production in terms of
million
 tonnes, with 24,7
million
.
However
, Africa and South and Central
America
 had the same data about 16,4 and 15,6
million
 tonnes in 2006.

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