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The table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five part of the world in 2006

The table below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five part of the world in 2006
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 two tables related to the total
number
 of
potatoes
Utilization
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 and
manufacture
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in five different world’s parts in 2006.
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, what
standout
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 from both of the tables is that the
number
 of people
Utilization
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potatoes
 in
Africa
 was
highest
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. Another interesting point is that in
Africa
 both
of
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the total
number
among
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potatoes consumer
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potato consumers
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or
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and
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manufacture
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was
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 lowest. Looking at the given
further
 detail, in 2006 the total
number
 of
potatoes
consumption
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 in
Africa
is more
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 higher than
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in others
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others
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part
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parts
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 all around the world
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 57,9 kg per person.
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 the amount of
potatoes
consumption
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consumed
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 in
south
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 and
central
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 America and Asia are quite shameful
within
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 23,6 and 25,6 kg per person respectively.
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 in
Africa
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 the amount of
potatoes
 utilization just get 14.1 kg per person in 2006.
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, in Asia
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number
 of
potatoes
million
tones
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producing
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produced
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 in 2006 was
highest
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within
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131.2
million
tones
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tonnes
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 just slightly higher than
Europe
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in Europe
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within
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 126,3
million
tones
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tonnes
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.Another interesting point is data about
production
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the production
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 of
potatoes
 in
south
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 and
central
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 America and
Africa
 are quite similar
within
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 15.6 and16,4
million
tones
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tonnes
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 in 2006.
However
, in
Africa
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Africa,
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these amount
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 just
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24.7
million
tones
 of
potatoes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, potatoes, africa, million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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