The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian boys and girls schools pupils attending 4 different sports activities after school in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian boys and girls schools pupils attending 4 different sports activities after school in 2010.
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The given illustration compares the proportion of Australian students of both sexes who attended 4 different
sports
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games post-school in 2010. Generally speaking, the number of female participants exceeded male ones in swimming, netball and no
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whereas
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the exceptions were seen in football and basketball.
Additionally
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, the number of boys was highest in football
while
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that of girls was highest in netball. Beginning with football, the number of male students attending was 20% of the total male population, compared to a mere 4% of female students.
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, the adverse trend was seen in netball in which the proportion of female participants was roughly 18% which was 6 times higher than that of male participants. Turning to the remaining statistics, the figures for swimming and no
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were proportional as the respective data for males and females was 12% and 16% for swimming and 4% and 5% for no
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.
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, the statistics for males in basketball were around 8% compared to 6% of that for females.
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