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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line chart provides key information about the
number
 of
graduates
 for both genders in Canada's
university
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universities
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 over the course of 15 years, from 1992 to 2007. The units are measured in
number
 of
graduates
.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the figure for
females
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graduates
 experienced a significant increase from 1992 to 2007.
In addition
, in 1992 the
females
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female's
females'
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 figure
were
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was
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 over 90000
of
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graduates
,
whereas
 males
was
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were
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 significantly under 80000.
According to
 what is shown,
femaled
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female
females
graduates
 started roughly at above 90000 in 1992,
then
 rose slightly to approximately 1100 by 1995. In 1996 the
number
 of
females
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female
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graduates
 decreased slowly, reaching
to
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apply
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10000
graduates
 and remained consistent throughout the year 1998.
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Afterwards
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Afterward
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Afterward,
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 the numbers rose dramatically, peaking above 140000
graduates
 in 2006. In terms of
males
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male
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graduates
, they
were
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started
about
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with about
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 70000
graduates
,
then
 the figure increased to approximately 7777 in 1994.
Subsequently
, the
number
 of
graduates
 declined to nearly in 1998. in 2000 It fluctuated around 7000
graduates
. Afterward it rose significantly reaching above 9000
graduates
 in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • notable
  • graduate numbers
  • gender disparity
  • rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • period
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • significant
  • overview
  • comparison
  • socio-economic
  • educational policies
  • cultural shifts
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