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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure, and work activities. Do the advantages of information technology outweigh the drawbacks?

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 argued that
people
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life
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 have significant changes
due to
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information
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technology
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 that dominates over aspects
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 as
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, leisure and work activities.
This
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, discuss how
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technology
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simplify
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people
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life
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 as one of the main
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 and
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, how it can lead to laziness as one of the main disadvantages, followed by a reasoned conclusion. One of the
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,
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information
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that information
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technology
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 makes
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the population's
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life
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 easier. It means that
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 many daily things could be done by programmed computers, robots or AI. With the help of
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technology
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, a simple apartment could be a smart
home
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, work activities could be automated or leisure more
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interesting
.
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, Highvill is a smart block-apartment that has many advantages
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 as a vacuum that cleans the
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 by itself when nobody
at
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home
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 or curtains are self-opening at sunrise and close at sunset. It significantly helps
people
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 to save time just by trusting
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technology
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. The main disadvantage associated with,
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 can get lazy
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inforamtion
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information
technology
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 that
cover
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 almost all aspects of
people
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's lives.
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,
people
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 do not use the whole potential brain opportunities
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 working or having leisure time and it can lead to excessive addiction
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 using things made by
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technology
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.
However
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,
information
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technology
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 makes
people
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's
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life
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 more enjoyable and
simplyfied
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simplified
. As an example, there is
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 remote robot station named Alisa with whom
people
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 can communicate, ask
some
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for some
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 tips and
fulfill
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 particular commands. It is a communicative version of Google.
As a result
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,
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technology
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 still has a positive impact on society.
To sum up
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, there is a domination of
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technology
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 over many aspects of
people
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's lives. Despite
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technology
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make
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people
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 get lazy, it still helps to simplify things and save a lot of time. The advantages of
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technology
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 outweigh the drawbacks.
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
Pay attention to minor grammatical and spelling errors, which slightly affect the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured and clearly present your main argument.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic well and provides a balanced view on both the advantages and disadvantages of information technology.

Your opinion

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