Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure, and work activities. Do the advantages of information technology outweigh the drawbacks?

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have significant changes

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information

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that dominates over aspects

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, discuss how

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as one of the main

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advantages

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information

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makes

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easier. It means that

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many daily things could be done by programmed computers, robots or AI. With the help of

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technology

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, a simple apartment could be a smart

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, work activities could be automated or leisure more

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interesting

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by itself when nobody

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or curtains are self-opening at sunrise and close at sunset. It significantly helps

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to save time just by trusting

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. The main disadvantage associated with,

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can get lazy

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information

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almost all aspects of

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's lives.

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people

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do not use the whole potential brain opportunities

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working or having leisure time and it can lead to excessive addiction

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using things made by

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makes

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more enjoyable and

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remote robot station named Alisa with whom

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can communicate, ask

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tips and

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particular commands. It is a communicative version of Google.

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information

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still has a positive impact on society.

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, there is a domination of

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over many aspects of

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's lives. Despite

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make

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people

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get lazy, it still helps to simplify things and save a lot of time. The advantages of

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technology

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outweigh the drawbacks.

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task achievement

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coherence cohesion

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coherence cohesion

Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured and clearly present your main argument.

task achievement

The essay addresses the topic well and provides a balanced view on both the advantages and disadvantages of information technology.

Your opinion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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304 words

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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure, and work activities. Do the advantages of information technology outweigh the drawbacks?

Your opinion

Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives. In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?

Some claim newspapers are the best means to get the most recent information because they have more influence than other forms of media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extend do you agree/ disagree with this option?

Some people think that a job provides not only an income but also a social life. Other people think that it is better to develop a social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.