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The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The alteration in the figure for
families
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 owning
cars
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 in a European nation from 1971 to 2001 is illustrated in the given bar chart. Generally ,
car
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 ownership rose during the
30 - year
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30-year
 period.
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, towards the end ,
families
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 with one
car
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 were significantly larger in comparison to those without or with 2
cars
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. Looking first in 1971, half of the population did not own a
car
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 , compared to nearly 35% of
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car
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owner
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owners
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 and more than 15% of
families
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 with 2
cars
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. By 1981, the percentage of households without
cars
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 largely decreased
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 %,
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one
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car
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 owners
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 dropped
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%. Those decreases corresponded with the notable increase of those with 2
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 ( rose more
15
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% ). Over the next decade, the most significant change was observed in the percentage of single-
car
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families
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, rising to reach the peak of 50%,
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 the opposite was true for those without
cars
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 or with 2
cars
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, declining to roughly a third and more than 22%, in that order. In the final years, the gap between
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car
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families
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 and those with 2
cars
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 became negligible ( 1%). Meanwhile, that figure for one-
car
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 households experienced a drop of 5%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, cars, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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