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The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.

The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.
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The given table illustrates the findings from a survey among 6800 adults in Scotland who were aged 16 and above, regarding their participation in various cultural activities in the past year.
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, as can be seen from the graph, any performance and undertaking any crafts were
most
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 popular categories for all
age
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 groups. With regard to
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the 16
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-24 and 25-44
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 groups, any performance
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had
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the highest
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 percentages which were 35% and 22% respectively. And
conversily
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conversely
,
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 for 16-24
ages
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group
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 and any writing for 24-44
age
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group
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 were the least popular categories which were 9% and 6% respectively. In terms of
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the 45
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-74
aged
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groups
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of people who participated in undertaking any craft which
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 the most popular
activities, at
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activity was
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 22%.
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 and any writing were
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the least
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age
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group
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.
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all aged 16 and over had a significant percentage in any performance category, at 22%.
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,
proportion
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the proportion
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 of people who preferred
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computer based
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 activities
were
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lowest
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the lowest
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age
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group
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, at 6%.
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