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The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by se/ecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Chart one demonstrates how many universe’s
oil
 resources were held in miscellaneous areas
while
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 the second bar chart illustrates the percentage of
oil
 consumption every year in each area.
Overall
; it is interesting to note that the Middle East has the highest grade in
oil
 resources,
whereas
 the remarkable amount of
oil
 consumed is for
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Asia. It is clearly shown that nearly 57% of total
oil
 resources are owned by the Middle East.
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,
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Canada has a considerable rank with 14.84% of
oil
resource
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.
In addition
, the rank of Central and
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 America, the
Easten
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Eastern
European
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Europe
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 and
the
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Africa
are
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fluctuated
in
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 6%
until
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 8%.
Moreover
, the other six divisions are under 3%.
According to
 the charts,
oil
 usage in
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Asia is 26.21% which is the most tangible in the second chart.
Also
, approximately half of
oil
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 consumption
are
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 consumed in both
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the united
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united states
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United States
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 and
Easten
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Eastern
 Europe.
Additionally
, the amount of
oil
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of
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 other countries
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 less than 7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • resources
  • consumption
  • annually
  • regions
  • disparity
  • consumption rates
  • high/low resources
  • global market dynamics
  • geopolitical relations
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