The charts below show what UK postgraduates and graduate students who did not get a full-time work did after leaving collegue in 2008

The charts below show what UK postgraduates and graduate students who did not get a full-time work did after leaving collegue in 2008
The given bar charts compare the numbers of graduates and postgraduates in the UK who did not get a full-time job and chose to do
after
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so after
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graduating from college in 2008. It is obvious that the number of graduates was significantly higher than that of postgraduates in each category.
In addition
,
further
study was the most common choice, as opposed to
the
Correct article usage
apply
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voluntary
work
was the least,for both student groups, during the period shown. In 2008, nearly 30000
students
went into
further
study,
while
the figures for those choosing voluntary
work
was ten times lower, at 3500. The
students
who got a part-time job were almost the same as their unemployed counterparts, at close to 17700 and over 16200 respectively. Postgraduates saw a similar pattern. There were approximately 300
students
chose
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who chose
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to do unpaid
work
, which was the least common decision. The most popular destinations for
this
group were
further
study and part-time
work
, at slightly above 2700 and around 2530 respectively.
Additionally
, more than 1600
students
are unemployed after leaving college.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.

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