The charts below show what UK postgraduates and graduate students who did not get a full-time work did after leaving collegue in 2008

The charts below show what UK postgraduates and graduate students who did not get a full-time work did after leaving collegue in 2008
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given bar charts compare the numbers of graduates and postgraduates in the UK who did not get a full-time job and chose to do
after
Rephrase
so after
show examples
graduating from college in 2008. It is obvious that the number of graduates was significantly higher than that of postgraduates in each category.
In addition
Linking Words
,
further
Linking Words
study was the most common choice, as opposed to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
voluntary
work
Use synonyms
was the least,for both student groups, during the period shown. In 2008, nearly 30000
students
Use synonyms
went into
further
Linking Words
study,
while
Linking Words
the figures for those choosing voluntary
work
Use synonyms
was ten times lower, at 3500. The
students
Use synonyms
who got a part-time job were almost the same as their unemployed counterparts, at close to 17700 and over 16200 respectively. Postgraduates saw a similar pattern. There were approximately 300
students
Use synonyms
chose
Correct pronoun usage
who chose
show examples
to do unpaid
work
Use synonyms
, which was the least common decision. The most popular destinations for
this
Linking Words
group were
further
Linking Words
study and part-time
work
Use synonyms
, at slightly above 2700 and around 2530 respectively.
Additionally
Linking Words
, more than 1600
students
Use synonyms
are unemployed after leaving college.
Submitted by picolodeptrai123 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: