The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows how carbonated beverages are made. Generally, there are 5 stages in manufacturing the product that
involves
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various filtration processes, beginning with
water
cleaning to packaging procedures.
To begin
, the first stage transmits the raw
water
into the filter machine to be later softened and added with a few essential chemicals to purify the liquid content from bacteria. In the next stage, the
water
is pumped to the electric heaters in order to evaporate the filtered liquid
then
follows the carbonation process with carbon dioxide through the cooling pipe. Through a longer pipe, the carbonated
water
is combined with colour, syrup, and flavour in the mixing tank.
Subsequently
, the
water
is filtered again with a different machine before is packed into two types of containers, bottles and cans.
Finally
, the carbonated
water
bottles and cans are folded by the box and distributed by trucks to the respective buyers.
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