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The charts below show the figures for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.

The charts below show the figures for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.
The presented bar charts
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 the amount of time that
workers
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 spent weekly in the industry in four different European nations in the year 2002. The figures were measured in percentages.
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, it can be seen that most employees worked in the industrial sector from 36 to 40
hours
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 in all four countries, except France.
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, Sweden has the highest
figure
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 in the chart. Looking at the figures in
further
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 detail, the percentage of
workers
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 spending 31 to 35
hours
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 topped the France chart, with 50%, followed by
36
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the 36
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 to 40
hours
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figure
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, with nearly 40% and the number of labourers working from 41 to 45
hours
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 was 20%.
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, Denmark had the highest rate
in
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 those spending 36 to 40
hours
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, with 70%, which was three times greater than the 31 to 35
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figure
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. It can be seen that the others were around 10% in two bar charts. Turning to the remaining statistics, it can be evident that the 36 to 40
hours
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workers
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 dominated half of the chart in the UK, lower than
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figure
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was
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 three types of employees working from 41 to more than 50
hours
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, between 10% and 20%.
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, the others were approximately 10%. In the same way, Sweden had the highest rate
in
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for
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 36 to 40
hours
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workers
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, with 80%,
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 the percentage for 31 to 35
hours
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 and 41 to 45
hours
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 was around 20% and 40%. What is more, the others fluctuated around 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, hours, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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