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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps show the main changes which have taken
place
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 in the central library from 20 years ago until now. In general,it can be seen that the library has become
a
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much more modern and categorized .
Also
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, its central space has become less crowded . One interesting change is that some food possibilities have been added ,including a café
in
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on
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 the right side of
entrance
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the entrance
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,which
it
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was
a
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an
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 enquiry desk
previosly
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previously
, and a Self-service
machines
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machine
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front
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in front
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the
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 café. The children's book has been transported to a bigger
place
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 with
sofa
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a sofa
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 and
a
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space for storytelling events and a lecture room has been constructed
instead
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 of
previous
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the previous
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 children's book. There were two big tables and chairs in the
center
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 of the library which have been removed in terms
of having
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 more free space .The reading room has been replaced with
computer
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a computer
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 room. The
place
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 which
were
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 the
place
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 of adult fiction books ,has turned into a
place
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 for all
refrences
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references
reference
book
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books
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.were

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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