The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts provide information about the changes
of
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employment
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the employment
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rate, which is
accompnied
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accompanied
by
portions'
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figure
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, in the UK between 1988 and 2012. Looking
form
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from
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an
overall
perspective,
it is clear that
the majority proportion of hiring occupies males' full-time jobs.
However
, the lowest one belongs to
mens'
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part-time types in both years. It is evident that in 1988,
males
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males'
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tendency towards full-time occupations
were
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higher than
the
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part-time
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of part-time
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ones.
However
, as men's preferences towards full-time jobs
was
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high, the rate of part-time occupations
were
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more popular among women in 1988. It is
referred
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reported
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that the ratio of men's employment in full-time jobs decreased dramatically from 53% in 1988
,
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to 47% in 2012.
However
, part-time males' employment came down slightly over these years.
In addition
, Females'
tendency
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tendencies
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completely changed over these years. Females' hiring priority changed to full-time occupations, which rose 7%. In stark contrast, the part-time types went down from 22% to 20%.
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