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The charts below show the percentage of workers in the sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in the sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.
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The bar charts delineate the percentage of
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workers
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 in 3 different sectors across 4 countries which are Germany, the USA,
Japan
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 and China between 1980 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is obvious that the fraction of the
workers
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 in
agriculture
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 experienced an upward trend,
while
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laborers
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 who worked in
industry
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 and
services
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 registered a downward trend. As the percentage of
workers
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 in
industry
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 was the highest,
agriculture
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 was the lowest. There was a dramatic growth in the number of
industry
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 workforce in Germany, in 1980, at 60%, and in 2010, it went up to 80%. The fraction of
agriculture
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workers
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 and
services
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workers
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 decreased slowly at the same time from about 5% to 1% and from around 50% to 40%, respectively. In comparison with the proportion of
workers
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 in
industry
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 from the USA, which experienced a significant rise in 1980 was approximately 52% to 70% in 2010, the amount of
agriculture
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 and
services
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 declined gradually (from about 9% to 5% and 48% to 47%) at
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industry
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workers
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 in
Japan
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 was 49% in 1980
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 before it soared sharply to 79% in 2010.
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 the figure for
agriculture
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workers
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 in China fell considerably (starting at 70%
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 decreasing to 50%), the fraction of
agriculture
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laborers
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labourers
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 in
Japan
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 registered a slight decline (from 11% to 10%) in two years, 1980 and 2010. Both
services
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workers
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 in 2 countries,
Japan
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 and China, experienced a moderate decrease in number, 39% to nearly 30% and approximately 49% to 20% in that order.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, japan, agriculture, industry, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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