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The table gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives information about the value of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates a comparison between
Japan
 ,
China
,
Japan
 ,
China
, Russia and Sudi
Arabia
 in the value of baying kiwi fruit from New Zealand from 2010 to 2012.
Overall
, the higher amount of export kiwi from New Zealand
have
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has
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 been done for
Japan
 and
China
 respectively.
While
 the lowest is for Russia and
Saudi
Arabia
 correspondingly. All
countries
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country's
countries'
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 export has
increase
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increased
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 except Mexico and
Saudi
Arabia
. On the one hand,the initial number in
Japan
 is 271,100,000,00 $
.
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In
in addition
, the figure experienced an
up
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upward
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wardtrend
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trend
 to 287,400.000.00 in 2011 and
continue
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continued
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 to
increased
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 to 325,300,000,00$ In 2012. Meanwhile,
China
is
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apply
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also
 rose from 74,900,000,00 in 2010 to 94,000,000,00. With regard to Russia , the is a slight increase compared with other countries
it
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start
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 at 968,000,00 and
ended
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ending
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with
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 82,000,00.
On the other hand
, there is some fluctuation in Mexico and
Saudi
Arabia
. The amount of money that Mexico
use
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used
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it
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apply
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to export
kiwi
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Kiwi
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decline
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declined
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 in 2011 to 2,400,000,00 .
However
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 it
shout
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 up next year to 3,300,000,00.
Although
Saudi
Arabia
 increased by around the
duble
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double
 in 2011 , it sharply declined in 2012 to 82,000,00.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, china, arabia, saudi with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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