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The line graph illustrates the production level of the three main fuels in the United Kindom (petroleum, coal, natural gas) in 19 years from 1981 to 2000.

The line graph illustrates the production level of the three main fuels in the United Kindom (petroleum, coal, natural gas) in 19 years from 1981 to 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the production level of the three main fuels in the United Kingdom (
petroleum
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, coal, and natural gas) over 19
years
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, from 1981 to 2000. Units are measured in millions of tons.
Overall
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,
petroleum
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 energy remains in first place among the three types of energy.
In addition
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,
petroleum
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 and natural gases went up over the given period,
whereas
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 coal went down. With regards to the production of
petroleum
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, it commenced at around 90 million tonnes in the first year, after which it rose to 140 million tonnes five
years
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 later. It
then
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 dropped to 100 in 1990 before increasing to 140 again in 2000.
Likewise
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, the energy of natural gas began at a bit less than 40, and it remained almost unchanged until 1990.
Following
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this
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, it skyrocketed to approximately 100 ten
years
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 later.
On the other hand
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, coal started at 80 in 1981, and after that, it plummeted to somewhere around 40 in around 1984. In the next two
years
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, it soared to 60 two
years
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 later and continued to decrease touching the lowest point (30 million tonnes) in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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