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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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When you enter the entrance of the library today,
it
Correct pronoun usage
there
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 is a cafe on your right hand and a computer
room
 on your left hand, which used to be an enquiry desk and reading
room
 20 years ago.
As services
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Services
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 dealing with tickets, book rentals and returns have shifted from person-to-person to computer using the self-service machines between the information desk and the cafe. The adult fiction
books
 area was moved to the current place on the right side of the library behind the information desk. The children's book corner was replaced by the lecture
room
 and it is given more
room
 for children's fiction
books
 with two
sofa
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sofas
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 and a space story
telling
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storytelling
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 events on the opposite side. Tables and chairs in the centre were taken away and there is more space. The adult non-fiction
books
 seem to be united into the corner of all reference
books
. The section
of
Change preposition
on
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 CDs, videos and computer games seems to be removed now.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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