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The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The given chart illustrates how many of the UK's citizens whose daily intake included 5
vegetables
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 and
fruits
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 proportion between 2001 and 2008.
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, it can be seen that even though
plants based
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plant-based
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diet
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diets
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 witnessed a growth in popularity among all ages and genders in
first
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the first
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 years,
it
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they
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 decreased for the
last
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 few years.
Additionally
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, when it comes to adults, especially
female
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females
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, they consumed
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 more than the youth over the provided timeframe. Regarding the 2
group
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 where
less
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 plants were eaten, about 18% and 12% of people were men and children, respectively, that had eaten 5 different types of
fruits
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 daily in 2001, both of which steadily rose to an identical peak of around 25% of the
popuplation
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population
 by 2007. As for males, their
fifure
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figure
 had little to no changes in the
last
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 year,
whereas
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 children's preference for
vegetables
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 dropped slightly by roughly 2%. Looking at the remaining group with the most significant rate of eating
fruits
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as well as
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vegetables
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, females who built their diet consisting of 5 types of plants accounted for more than 22% of
poeple
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people
initially
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 before rising gradually by
a
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half to over 35% by 2006.
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, in the
last
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 2 years, the number saw a petty reduction of approximately 5%
at the end
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 of the given period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetables, fruits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • portion
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stability
  • public health campaign
  • awareness
  • socio-economic factors
  • health implications
  • daily intake
  • nutritional habits
  • dietary guidelines
  • public policy
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