The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The chart compares how the income is spent by
families
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in 1968 and five decades later within a seven-day period.
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, the majority of expenditure in the baseline year was allocated for food
whereas
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leisure slightly dominated the budget used by the households in 2018. In 1968, exactly 35 per
cent
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of the
families
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' income was dedicated to food, or significantly higher than other allocations that accounted for no more than 10 per
cent
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.
Families
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' budget for housing,
together with
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clothing and footwear represented one-tenth
each
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of the
overall
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budget. Fuel and power contributed the smallest allocation amongst others by just above 5 per
cent
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. Interestingly, the households' expenditure trends have significantly changed in 2018 except for household goods purchases which remained stable at 7 per
cent
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. The biggest difference occurred in the decline of food spending to around 15 to 20 per
cent
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,
while
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the money needed to fulfil housing and leisure rose to almost two out of ten and just above one-fifth.
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, about 15 per
cent
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of transport costs were required to be spent by the
families
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as compared to the previous five decades by just under 10 per
cent
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.
Finally
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, the remaining income allocations in 2018 were below 5 per
cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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