The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the given chart illustrates the proportion of
Australian
of both genders who worked each week in the year 2007.
Fix the agreement mistake
Australians
It is clear that
in 2007 , the amount of time females spent working were
higher than males from 0 to 20 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
hours
but between 30 and 80 hours
it was complete
opposite .Add an article
the complete
Additionally
the number of Add a comma
Additionally,
hours
which women and men spent on work was the same in this
period.
From 0 to 10 hours
, 15 per cent
of women workers was 3 times as much as the men .With around 22,5 proportion, the female still doubles the percentage of the males one
in the range of 10 to 20 Correct pronoun usage
apply
hours
.
Approximately 42,5 per cent
of men spend 30 to 50 hours
per week while
in this
range of hours
, women only had 35 per cent
of the the total.From 60 to 80 hours
, the figure for male workers was 30 per cent
which is
is double the proportion for females .Unnecessary verb
apply
Furthermore
, over 80 hours
the percentage in both genders was the same.Submitted by Nghỉ hè vui vẻ cả nhà on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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