The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
population
in Add an article
the population
differante
age groups who visited at least one or more Correct your spelling
different
museums
between 2006 ,2010 and 2016.
Overall
,the age in
55-64 Change preposition
of
have
the highest number of Change the verb form
has
people
who visited museums
in total.It is clear see
that in 2006, Verb problem
apply
people
in middle
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the middle
aged
went to Replace the word
ages
museums
made
up Verb problem
apply
by
40%.Change preposition
apply
However
,the elderly people
who went to one or more museums
are
the lowest amount of total numbers in these three years,which percentage of numbers are less than 25%.
The youngest group in 2006,2011and 2016 had Verb problem
have
simaliry
proportion of Replace the word
a similar
people
who went to museums
(25%,26% and 25%).However
,when people
get older the numbers get higher, the figure for the aged 25-34 and 35-44 showed upward
trend in these three years(28%,30%,32% and 20%,30%,37%)Add an article
an upward
respectivily
.Correct your spelling
respectively
While
the aged 45 to 54 not
that into Add a missing verb
were not
went
to Wrong verb form
going
museum
like Fix the agreement mistake
museums
people
in 35-44
, the figures in 2011 and 2016 showed the same percentage(30%).Change preposition
to 44
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