The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001.

The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001.
The line graph illustrates the percentages of employees in five European countries who were absent for a day or more
due to
sickness between 1991 and 2001.
Overall
,
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the Netherland’s
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Netherland’s
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Netherlands’s
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trend
was predominant
in
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all year, except for the first
one
. The figures of
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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and Sweden each experienced an increase, with the difference being that the former country’s
figure
dipped in the middle of the
period
,
while
that of the latter
one
showed consistent growth. The trends of the remaining countries, namely
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, Germany, and France, all remained virtually stable, except for France’s, which declined steadily in the first half of the
period
. In 1991, just under 5% of workers from
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the Netherlands
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were absent
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work
due to
being ill.
Next
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year, the number increased to about 5,5%, but started declining steadily in 1993, reaching a point
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about 4% in 1996.
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was followed by an increase
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almost 1% in 1997, and
then
further
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a further
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rise; by the end of the
period
, the
figure
stood at nearly 6%. Sweden’s
trend
remained almost unchanged in the first five years, fluctuating between just under and just above 3%. From 1996, the
figure
grew to about 3,2%, and
then
to 3,5% in 1997. The
trend
experienced consistent growth
further
in the
period
, reaching a point of approximately 5,5% by 2001. France, whose percentage was
initially
the highest, showed a significant decline in its
figure
. In
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, it started
with
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about 5%, and went up slightly in 1992; but in the next
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it dipped by almost 1%, and continued declining until 1996
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when its
figure
had reached a point just above 3%. The number remained completely unchanged for the rest of the
period
. As for the remaining countries, namely
UK
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the UK
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and Germany, their trends experienced only slight changes. The
figure
of
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the former
one
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fluctuated between 2% and just above 2% over the
period
, increasing from 2% in 1991 to about 2,3% in 2001. The
trend
of the latter
one
fluctuated from 2% to just below it all over the
period
, showing a minor decline
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approximately 0,3%
at the end
of the
period
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, further".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, one, figure, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dipped" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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