The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the proportions of visitors from different age categories of a country,
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who attended museums in three Change the punctuation
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years
2006,2011 and 2016.
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Overall
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while
the citizens above 65 Linking Words
years
showed the least interest in those old places in all three Use synonyms
years
, the 55 - 54 range depicted the highest value.Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the Year 2016 was the greatest demanded era for that location.
When looking at the given data,in the year 2006, the age gap of 55-64 reported the peak amount gained by the museum, accounting for 40% . Linking Words
Similarly
, the year's minimal attendees were noted in the two Linking Words
groups
younger than 55 Use synonyms
years
and the members beyond 65, which are half of the top. In the same way, Qatar per cent was witnessed by the two youngest Use synonyms
groups
.
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On the other hand
,in 2011, a similar portion of 30% of people from the first four Linking Words
groups
under 55 Use synonyms
years
went to see those ancient things whilst, the apex of 35% and the smallest of just under one-fifth per cent are noted in o 55 to 64 and 65 + Use synonyms
groups
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consequently
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Meanwhile while
Meanwhilewhile
, 2016 showed its most frequent visits of just above one-third per cent in the middle age interval when the tiniest figure of 22%
was seen in the eldest team. Particularly, 30% of the others observed old buildings in 2016.Correct your spelling
Meanwhile
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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