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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010
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The two tables describe information about the
proportion
 of
individuals
 employed in three different sectors (
Agriculture
,
Services
Industry
 ) across four different
countries
 Germany, Japan,
China
, and the USA in 1980 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
 perspective,
it is clear that
 the percentage of workers in
agriculture
 and
services
 of all
countries
 experienced a decrease => downward trend,
while
 the
proportion
 of
individuals
 employed in
industry
 across three different
countries
 registered an upward trend, except for
China
.
In addition
, the percentage accounting for the largest amount of
agriculture
 workers in
China
, but the
proportion
 of
industry
 workers in
this
 country
the
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 lowest amount over the period.
First,
in 1980, the distribution of the workforce in Germany showed that 60% of
individuals
 worked in
industry
, with
services
 and
agriculture
 accounting for 50% and 5%, respectively. In the United States and Japan about half the workforce was employed in
industry
 and a minority in
agriculture
.
China
 had the highest agricultural workforce, at 70%, more than
services
 and
industry
 at 20% and 30%, respectively. As observed in the second table, in 2010,
industry
 in Germany,
US
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 and Japan had a slight increase, from 70% to 80%,
while
China
's
industry
 remained steady at 40%.
Services
 in
China
 decreased significantly by 30%, the remaining
countries
 decreased by 10%.
Whereas
China
’s
proportion
 of
individuals
 employed in
agriculture
 experienced a 20% plunge, the figures for the remaining three
countries
 remain accounting for less than 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, individuals, agriculture, services, industry, countries, china with synonyms.
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