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The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2Ff9d6600c48d153943878eff0d17c6886.png&w=640&q=75

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. https://writing9.com/_next/image?url=https%3A%2F%2Fimages.writing9.com%2Ff9d6600c48d153943878eff0d17c6886.png&w=640&q=75
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The line chart provides key information about population size,
birth
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rate
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 and death
rate
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 in England and Wales between 1700 and 2000. The units are measured in millions and
rate
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 (per 1000
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people
peple
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people
)
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, it is clear from the graph that
population
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the population
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 ratio experienced
a
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apply
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substantial growth over the years.
In addition
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, there was a gradual
declined
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decline
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 in
birth
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 and death
percent
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per cent
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.
According to
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 what is shown, population size
increase
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increases
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 until
reach
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reaches
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 10 million
the
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then
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 slightly
decrease
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decreases
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 to approximately
fifth
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a fifth
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. After that, soared to the maximum value which
is 50millions
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was 50 million
 by 2000. In terms of
birth
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rate
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, it
initially
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 starts from 30 percent
until
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and
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reach
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reaches
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the
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a
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 peak
with
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of
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 40
rate
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 in 1750
then
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 remains constant by 1800.
Afterward
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, it dropped to nearly 22
percent
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per cent
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 and
then
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 jumped to about 34% by 2000.
Similarly
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, death of
birth
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 showed the same pattern with less
rate
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 until 1950
then
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 remained constant
to
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until
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 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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