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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
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The table provides key data about transitional
of
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apply
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travel in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 from 1985 to 2000 for eight types: walking, bicycle, car, local bus,
long distance
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long-distance
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 bus, train, taxi, and other.
Moreover
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, all the models are measured by
miles
Use synonyms
.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table that all the sectors are increasing over the years.
In addition
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, bicycles are
quiet
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quite
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 reducing between 51 to 41,
whereas
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 cars rise about mostly 1500
miles
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 per person.
According to
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 what is shown, private transport
such
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 as cars become more popular than public transport, bicycles, and local buses dropped to 41 and 274
miles
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 per person, respectively. In terms, long distance
bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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, trains, and Taxis are advanced to high
miles
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. Generally, every single model
have
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has
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 changed by decades.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modes of travel
  • average distance
  • per person per year
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change/trend
  • vehicle usage
  • public transportation
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • economic growth
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