The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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show
us how temporary migrant workers increased between Change the verb form
shows
years
2003 and 2006.
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the years
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, there are Linking Words
compars
about four Correct your spelling
compares
countrys
: Australia, New Correct your spelling
countries
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zealand
, Change the capitalization
Zealand
United
Kingdom and Correct article usage
the United
United
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the United
states
, Capitalize word
States
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additionally
the Add a comma
additionally,
last
column presents numbers in scale per thousand people for each country about 2006.
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Firstly
, Australia had 152 thousand Linking Words
temporay
migrant workers and Correct your spelling
temporary
increase
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increased
this
number to 219,000.
The second line Linking Words
it
is about New Correct pronoun usage
apply
Zealand
, Use synonyms
this
small country Linking Words
have
a Change the verb form
has
sighly
growth starting at 65,000 and reaching 87,000 Correct your spelling
highly
slightly
migrants
in 2006;
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Third
line, Change the article
the Third
UK
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the UK
practly
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practice
have
a double of Wrong verb form
had
migrants
in 2006 when Use synonyms
compares
with 2003. It is 137,000 versus 266,000 Wrong verb form
compared
peoples
that arrived from other places;
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people
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the Change preposition
In
last
Line, Linking Words
United
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the United
states
have Capitalize word
States
a
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an
absoluty
increment in Correct your spelling
absolutely
absolute
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the numbers
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
migrants
, 678,000 in 2006 Use synonyms
instead
of 577,000 in 2003, but Linking Words
proporcially
they Correct your spelling
proportionally
improve
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have improved
less
than 20%.
Now Change preposition
by less
analising
the Correct your spelling
analysing
last
column the Linking Words
scenary
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scenery
change
and even New Replace the word
changed
Zealand
has been Use synonyms
the
less increase, the number Correct article usage
a
os
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of
migrants
per Use synonyms
people
far weigh all other countries, is 21.1 versus, 10,7 Fix the agreement mistake
person
to
Australia, 4,4 Change preposition
for
to
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for
UK
and 2,3 Correct article usage
the UK
to
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for
USA
. It Shows how much New Correct article usage
the USA
Zealand
is more searched by Use synonyms
migrants
than Use synonyms
others
countries, when we talk about Correct quantifier usage
other
density
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the density
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of
migrants
related a number Use synonyms
of
population.Change preposition
apply
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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