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Band 3.5

It is often said that students who graduates and apply to the university their needed knowledge and skills

It is often said that
students
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 who
graduates
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 and apply to the
university
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 their needed
knowledge
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 and
skills
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.
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that
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is that
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 the
university
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the
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is the
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 main function with
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knowledge
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the knowledge
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their
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they're
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 needed in the future. The main function of
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university
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a university
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 should be a balanced approach that integrates both practical
skills
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 and theoretical
knowledge
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.
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Moreover
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students
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 should assess the study conditions that affect
to
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the
university
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,
such
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 as access to education,
recources
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resources
 and support networks. Universities should teach practical things
along with
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 theory to help
students
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 succeed in real-world
job
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jobs
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.
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 is to understand the complexities of the
university
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 and the factors that contribute to the among
students
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.
This
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 includes examining the role of
student
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the student
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. My own view on the matter
it
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is
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 dependent on what kind of student request who are
interovested
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interested
introverted
 to the new
knowledge
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as well as
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 what value
university
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 has. Most
of
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apply
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universities
they
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apply
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ask
higher
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for higher
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 education and different
skills
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, but the
skills
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 they develop can be invaluable in roles that require strong
skills
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.
While
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university
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 support is crucial, expecting governments alone to address the student in compensation for modern
students
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 may not be entirely practical, including a
knowledge
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 that values diverse study expressions and community involvement,
are
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which are
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 equally important. In conclusion, I believe that the main function of a
university
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 should be a mix of practical training and broad education. By addressing these inequalities together,
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university
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the university
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 can create
a more inclusive
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a more inclusive student
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students
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 for
knowledge
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 and
skills
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,
insuring
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ensuring
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 that
own
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our own
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 benefit continues to enrich and use in our job.

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Structure and Flow
Improve the logical flow of ideas. Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next and that all parts of your argument are clearly connected.
Topic Understanding
Your essay touches on important aspects such as the role of practical skills and theoretical knowledge, showing an understanding of the topic.
Relevance of Points
You have addressed the issue of student support and resources, which is relevant to the discussion of university functions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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