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The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given designs illustrate how houses are built in times of cool and warm climates. To summarise, there are two distinct designs for both climates, which can be differentiated by the shape of the roofs.
On
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cool
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a cool
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 climate, it can be seen that
roof
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the roof
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 has a high angle, allowing the sun to directly enter the room through the window.
Moreover
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, the room was built with a thermal material, which will decrease the heat loss. For the warm climate, the roof was designed like a pyramid shape to
overhangs
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overhang
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 the shade when it was a day time.
However
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,
on
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at
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the
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apply
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night time, the room has a ventilation feature that will
removed
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remove
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 excess heat
which
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apply
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stored during the day.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • thermal mass
  • insulation
  • ventilation
  • draft
  • heat dissipation
  • exposure to sunlight
  • extended eaves
  • overhangs
  • reflective materials
  • south-facing
  • north-facing
  • porches
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