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The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.
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As observed, the
tabe
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table
 displays
population
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 trends following three countries;
China
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,
India
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 and the USA
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 having been regarded as the three most populated countries in the world. The data is displayed by the country's order and lists their
population
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, percentage increase, land area, density and urban
population
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. From a general standpoint,
China
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 and
India
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 have staggering differences from the US when it comes to
population
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. Despite the countries, except for
India
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,
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 similar land
area
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, they all have widely different results.
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, each of the features usually has one country having skyrocketing values with the others having low numbers or
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 somewhere in the middle.
China
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 and
India
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has s
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 similar
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population
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populations
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 of around 1.4 billion people,
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 the USA has around 300 million. Despite
this
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,
China
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 is experiencing less of a
population
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 increase having 0.39% compared to
India
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's 1.11% and
US'
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the US'
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 0.71%.
It's
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 density is widely varied
btween
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between
 the three with
India
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 leading with a high 455 people per square kilometre, doubling
China
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's and US'
desnity
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density
destiny
 combined.
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, their urban
population
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 is
also
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 quite diverse, Despite having a high
population
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India
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 remains the lowest in urban
population
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 with a third of its
population
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while
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China
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 and the US
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 more than half of their
population
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 living in urban areas.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age distribution
  • urbanization
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • healthcare accessibility
  • literacy rate
  • educational attainment
  • demographic trends
  • comparative analysis
  • socio-economic factors
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