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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Reasons for study according to age of student

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Reasons for study according to age of student
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rasons
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reasons
 for study among students of different
age
 groups and the amount of support they received from employers. The recycling rate of
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age
 26 is showed higher it’s about 80% for
career
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about
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for interest it’s about 10%
percent
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per cent
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,compared to
age
 49 for
interest
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the interest
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 it’s about 76% and for
career
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careers
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 is about 25
percent
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per cent
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 when we looked at the chart reasons for study
according to
age
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the age
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 of student we see for career the older get be lower than other.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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