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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to explain
about
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the
bus
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service
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 problem, we
are
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 confronting
from
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for
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 the past two weeks. I am James and I live
in
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near
city
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the city
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center
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 mall, Mumbai. The Rainbow transport
service
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bus
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 number ME-1527 is pick up me daily at morning 8.AM,
last
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 2 to 3 weeks the
bus
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 is not coming to the actual time. Sometimes it did not come to the boarding for us.
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, I cannot go
the
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 office at
correct
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the correct
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 time not only
me
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in my area
there
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are most working women
all
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are facing the same problem. Nowadays
city
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the city
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 is having more traffic
crisis
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 during
the
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office hours. If the
bus
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 is not coming
to
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 the correct time everyone who
are rely
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relies
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 on
this
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bus
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service
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 will
be suffer
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.
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, as a manager of the
rainbow
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Rainbow
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 transport
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service
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 you will understand our problems. So kindly scrutinize
this
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 issue and resolve it as soon as possible. Regards James

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coherence
Make sure each paragraph contains a single main idea. Splitting your explanation and suggestions into separate paragraphs would improve clarity.
grammar
Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and easy to understand by checking for minor errors.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task, providing a description of the problem, its effects, and suggestions for improvement.
tone
Your tone is appropriately formal and respectful, which is suitable when writing to a company manager.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering to schedules
  • inconvenience
  • daily routine
  • punctuality
  • frequency during peak hours
  • overcrowding
  • commuters
  • update system
  • reliable
  • maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • irregular bus timings
  • passengers
  • delays
  • unreliable
  • appointments
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