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Language teacher should concentrate only on giving positive feedback when students do good work rather than on criticizing their bad work. To what extent you agree or disagree?

#language #teacher #feedback #students #work
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Concentrating only on giving positive feedback when
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 do good work rather than
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criticizing their bad work by terminology
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 has sparked considerable debate.
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 I understand the reason behind
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 suggestion, I still wholeheartedly disagree with it for several reasons. Those who believe that positive feedback should be given to
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 its benefits may have several arguments. They may well argue that if the teacher only gives
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 positive
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 after finishing their tasks , they may think that they have the power to do it much better, thereby motivating them to keep learning in the future. Another possible argument is that enlistment who receive positive observation may trust their performance and they will confidently believe in themself, they would not be stressed about learning a new vocabulary.
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, they may feel pleased when there is a following style lesson they are going to learn.
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, I still oppose
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 view for several reasons. Chief among these is that the
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 should give both bad and good feedback to
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this
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 way just make enlistment acknowledge their mistakes and
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 fix them but they can
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 know what they are good at and
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 improve it.
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 is because in learning a new dialect there are many skills that enlistment
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 to master, especially Speaking and Writing skills.
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, when
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 positive or negative
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 should be given as individuals not
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 the whole team because
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 not feel shy and nervous about the problems they make.
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, if they pronounce some words incorrectly during the lesson, the assistant can talk to them
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 of the class about their problems and how they can do it better. In conclusion, it is understandable why some may argue that accent
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 should tell recruitment the good side they made
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 of telling them the truth which is the bad thing they need to improve.
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, I cannot support
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 a view given the aforementioned reasons.
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